Tuesday, May 17, 2011

One shot

If you are there - and I am here,
and that heap our jumbled up dreams..
are mere twists and gone,
and the spark be lost -
then call it a day - and blame - destiny

copyright*budhaaah*for One Shot Wednesday and Imperfect Prose and the 160 that was

16 comments:

  1. and perhaps that is the best we can ask for in that instance...

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  2. I enjoy short punchy poems the most. Loving this. Shah. X

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  3. Blame destiny....that's all you can do :)

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  4. Destiny gets blamed for so many things... smiles. Nice write.

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  5. A direct summing up of loss and resignation--not sentimental, but plenty of feeling nonetheless.

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  6. a sad place to be...and no matter who to blame..how did you manage to get so much sadness into such few lines...?

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  7. Blame destiny, now theres a thought. Another great poem, short but bitter-sweet.

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  8. Sometimes when people say, "It was meant to be" - I sorta' get a bit agitated, because on the other hand, I'd like to think we make our own choices, our own paths, our own destinies. I also like to believe the quantum leap type of theory (or is it scientific) that we are doing 4 different endings to a story... ok.. this made me think WAY too much. ;)

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  9. Destiny, a good a reason as any. Nice write.

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  10. Sometimes that's all one can do I suppose...facing our own hand in such devastation can be...unsettling.

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  11. Technically speaking the - pauses- are perfectly placed/ I liked reading this. (poke)

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  12. oh yes, sometimes we just need to 'call it a day'!

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  13. Or Blame Destiny's Child! or Beyonce!

    As always--you touch a spot in my Heart!

    J

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  14. Packs a great punch =) Great job!

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  15. and that heap our jumped up dreams... LOVE this line :)

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