Tuesday, April 26, 2011

the One Shot void..

the void - gapes
at the emptiness within

the void - apes
the turmoil within

the void - rapes
the peace within

and something dies....

copyright*budhaaah*
for One Shot Wednesday
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14 comments:

  1. Brian MillerApril 26, 2011 at 2:13 PM

    intense words...so sad...the violation and death...

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  2. dustusApril 26, 2011 at 9:34 PM

    Powerful arrangement in so few words. I think the pattern adds to the effect.

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  3. Elizabeth YoungApril 26, 2011 at 9:39 PM

    I agree, short but powerful, often less is more!

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  4. ValerieApril 27, 2011 at 3:49 AM

    Gosh, that's clever. Well done.

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  5. the walking manApril 27, 2011 at 5:18 AM

    let the fucking void be the dead thing, step across it to he land where there is some fresh air.

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  6. Maude LynnApril 27, 2011 at 5:54 AM

    This is really good!

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  7. BubbaApril 27, 2011 at 8:39 AM

    Null.

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  8. DeLiApril 27, 2011 at 8:47 AM

    how paradoxical isnt it, how emptiness can fill...

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  9. AnonymousApril 27, 2011 at 10:19 AM

    I like it very much... the words, and what they don't spell out as well. Clever!

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  10. LauraApril 27, 2011 at 2:10 PM

    so powerful and clear!

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  11. ayalaApril 27, 2011 at 3:50 PM

    powerful and sad!

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  12. John (@bookdreamer)April 28, 2011 at 1:30 AM

    and in the void shall darkness rise

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  13. DebApril 28, 2011 at 11:31 AM

    Fill it fill it fill it I say! Powerful words.

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  14. CathyApril 28, 2011 at 3:34 PM

    a vacuum dreams of nothing more than to be filled

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