Tuesday, February 8, 2011

Paints you black..

Stray pieces of truth opaque in the clear water,
where shadows are solid yet not tangible..
The beam of light takes the layers off bit by bit,
and yet I hope its just the brush that paints you black.

copyright*budhaaah*
for http://onestoppoetry.com/2011/02/one-shot-wednesday-week-32

14 comments:

  1. This is not the first layered poem I have read.
    Yes hopefully the revelation is a colorful one

    thanks for sharing with One Shot

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  2. How deeply does the light penetrate if it is not enough there may never be an answer to your hope. Even light gets lost in a black hole.

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  3. this one is gonna stick with me all day. Great write.

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  4. hi there,
    very nice. I like the calm even flow with this one

    thanks for the visit and comment on mine and here is the address to the site where I got the animation from

    http://www.thecutestblogontheblock.com/

    Have a wonderful day

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  5. ...i hope its just the brush that paints you black...lots of layers in your poem..makes me think..

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  6. You've said a great deal in a few short sentences...and said it very well.

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  7. nice...my fav pearl jam song is Black...this reminds me of that...nice layering...

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  8. Awesome piece! Reminds me of the description, "layers of an onion".
    Loved it.

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  9. Just the brush that paints you black.. says a lot and says it all. I liked it very much.. Thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

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  10. Woww... yes, peel it off, layer by layer... and we may eventually get around to seeing what's really there...
    Beautifully written OSW, B!!

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