Tuesday, February 8, 2011

Paints you black..

Stray pieces of truth opaque in the clear water,
where shadows are solid yet not tangible..
The beam of light takes the layers off bit by bit,
and yet I hope its just the brush that paints you black.

copyright*budhaaah*
for http://onestoppoetry.com/2011/02/one-shot-wednesday-week-32
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14 comments:

  1. moondustwriterFebruary 8, 2011 at 9:54 PM

    This is not the first layered poem I have read.
    Yes hopefully the revelation is a colorful one

    thanks for sharing with One Shot

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  2. gautami tripathyFebruary 9, 2011 at 12:39 AM

    Like the layers in here...


    ransom

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  3. the walking manFebruary 9, 2011 at 2:01 AM

    How deeply does the light penetrate if it is not enough there may never be an answer to your hope. Even light gets lost in a black hole.

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  4. ValerieFebruary 9, 2011 at 2:06 AM

    Nice one, Budhaaah

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  5. AnonymousFebruary 9, 2011 at 5:28 AM

    this one is gonna stick with me all day. Great write.

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  6. HopeFebruary 9, 2011 at 6:13 AM

    hi there,
    very nice. I like the calm even flow with this one

    thanks for the visit and comment on mine and here is the address to the site where I got the animation from

    http://www.thecutestblogontheblock.com/

    Have a wonderful day

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  7. ClaudiaFebruary 9, 2011 at 9:26 AM

    ...i hope its just the brush that paints you black...lots of layers in your poem..makes me think..

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  8. hedgewitchFebruary 9, 2011 at 11:09 AM

    You've said a great deal in a few short sentences...and said it very well.

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  9. Full-On-ForwardFebruary 9, 2011 at 4:13 PM

    Again..WOW!

    John

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  10. Steve IsaakFebruary 10, 2011 at 12:42 AM

    Thought swirling, layered work.

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  11. Brian MillerFebruary 10, 2011 at 5:26 AM

    nice...my fav pearl jam song is Black...this reminds me of that...nice layering...

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  12. DebFebruary 10, 2011 at 7:10 AM

    Awesome piece! Reminds me of the description, "layers of an onion".
    Loved it.

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  13. Shashidhar SharmaFebruary 11, 2011 at 2:40 AM

    Just the brush that paints you black.. says a lot and says it all. I liked it very much.. Thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

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  14. KavitaFebruary 11, 2011 at 1:20 PM

    Woww... yes, peel it off, layer by layer... and we may eventually get around to seeing what's really there...
    Beautifully written OSW, B!!

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