Sunday, January 16, 2011

160, one shoot..and poetry Potluck

Come
Be with me
For an eternity...

Let us not be
Murdered
By reality...

whisper
- tenderly - into my soul
your entry...

Come smile - open your eyes
As you slay
Me gently...


copyright*budhaaah*
For one shoot, 160 and poetry Potluck
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11 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJanuary 17, 2011 at 3:45 AM

    slay me gently...intriguing that you go from not letting life murder you to willingly being slayed...

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  2. the walking manJanuary 17, 2011 at 4:50 AM

    No one slays, even metaphorically, with their eyes closed. Slaying someone always is with intent Darlin' never by accident.

    j you do have great talent at provoking a "from the gut" response or feeling with your short line free verse and I love it.

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  3. Uma AnandaneJanuary 17, 2011 at 5:54 AM

    You got the guts to be slayed...Nice attempt at 160..
    Join us to be a part of it!!!
    http://umaspoembook.blogspot.com/2011/01/experimenting-with-poetry-forms_16.html

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  4. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJanuary 17, 2011 at 5:57 AM

    Let us not be
    Murdered
    By reality...

    killing line, how divine.
    love your 160.
    A++

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  5. AnonymousJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:07 AM

    wow! wow! feels good to read this! thank you for sharing.. here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/19/my-whole-world/

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  6. The Girl In The CornerJanuary 17, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    Have to agree with Jingle on the winning line!

    Very good :)

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  7. Full-On-ForwardJanuary 17, 2011 at 5:45 PM

    Slay Misty for me!

    Beautiful!

    J

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  8. BubbaJanuary 18, 2011 at 8:24 AM

    "Killing me softy with his song..."

    A nice grouping!

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  9. AnonymousJanuary 18, 2011 at 2:49 PM

    Mindful and thoughtful words!

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  10. eyeographyJanuary 20, 2011 at 12:35 PM

    Amazing...the last two stanzas are brilliant... :)

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  11. SHUBHAJITJanuary 22, 2011 at 5:14 AM

    Generally people slay with an open eyes. We know everything but still we do what causes pain.

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    I like rhythm and musical tone of this verse.

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