Saturday, September 18, 2010

just be..

1.

I'll sigh content
If you let me be,
The sapling under
your banyan tree..

2.

Let the memory remain
after the pain
of the plight

for memories be
your only warmth
on a cold cold night..


copyright*budhaaah*

14 comments:

  1. Hi there, it is so nice to find you again. Why so sad?

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  3. 'Sad' is the general state of mind nowadays..
    Glad you came back here too.

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  4. Sit then under said tree until you have become well rooted. You will find the Banyan shares both shade and water with ease. It is effortless to cast away sorrow and work to hold it. I am a lazy sapling and will go with the effortless.

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  5. the two verses seem to be in opposition...under the banyan inclusion...the memory the loss...or perhaps it is only memory that grows under the banyan tree...nice one shot

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  6. I really like your style.
    Nice, short and to the point!

    great One Shot :)

    loveNlight

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  7. Such a change from stanza 1 to 2. As if a lesson learned between, and it will not be the former sap(ling) reliant on the warmth of recollection. As Gabriela stated, like your style. cheers

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  8. A nice duet of poems for One Shot!

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  9. I love the transition. Sad that the emptiness is the end stanza

    Moon thanks for One Shot

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  10. Brian,
    thanks a lot for the encouraging words.

    Gabriela,
    Thank you for your kind words
    (I know this out of context but you have a beautiful name)

    Dustus,
    Thanks a ton

    Eric,
    I am glad you liked it.

    Moondustwriter,
    I just gave this a shot not knowing that someone will actually stop by..thanks

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  11. I think our poems this week have much in common. I was writing about a young woman, to free and easy with her body was used and abandoned, but couldn't stop reaching out and hoping that she'd find love. I think there is always pain when love fails especially if it's only a one-sided love. Thanks for posting. You got the job done in far fewer words than I did. :) Gay @beachanny

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  12. Beachanny,
    Thank you so much. I really appreciate it. Few words or lots
    If we drive the point across
    its good :)

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  13. Beautiful... memories be the warmth... liked it..


    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  14. Thanks Shashi,
    I saw your blog..it has some great photographs..

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