I am - and - I was/ I feel - and yet - I lost/ I am - in deep/
and yet I float/ In debt and yet/
- I hope..
Hi there, it is so nice to find you again. Why so sad?
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'Sad' is the general state of mind nowadays..Glad you came back here too.
Sit then under said tree until you have become well rooted. You will find the Banyan shares both shade and water with ease. It is effortless to cast away sorrow and work to hold it. I am a lazy sapling and will go with the effortless.
the two verses seem to be in opposition...under the banyan inclusion...the memory the loss...or perhaps it is only memory that grows under the banyan tree...nice one shot
I really like your style.Nice, short and to the point!great One Shot :)loveNlight
Such a change from stanza 1 to 2. As if a lesson learned between, and it will not be the former sap(ling) reliant on the warmth of recollection. As Gabriela stated, like your style. cheers
A nice duet of poems for One Shot!
I love the transition. Sad that the emptiness is the end stanzaMoon thanks for One Shot
Brian,thanks a lot for the encouraging words.Gabriela,Thank you for your kind words(I know this out of context but you have a beautiful name)Dustus,Thanks a tonEric,I am glad you liked it.Moondustwriter,I just gave this a shot not knowing that someone will actually stop by..thanks
I think our poems this week have much in common. I was writing about a young woman, to free and easy with her body was used and abandoned, but couldn't stop reaching out and hoping that she'd find love. I think there is always pain when love fails especially if it's only a one-sided love. Thanks for posting. You got the job done in far fewer words than I did. :) Gay @beachanny
Beachanny,Thank you so much. I really appreciate it. Few words or lotsIf we drive the point acrossits good :)
Beautiful... memories be the warmth... liked it..ॐ नमः शिवाय Om Namah ShivayaTwitter: @VerseEveryDayBlog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
Thanks Shashi,I saw your blog..it has some great photographs..