Wednesday, February 16, 2011

I owe you my Valentine

Tis the worst Valentine I had
Tis the first time I’d hoped,
Had chopped away diligently
The layers of crust surrounding my soul..

Tis the first moonbeam
That has entered my scream,
It was not easy to die
amidst shattered dreams..

T’was the trust of a child
Betrayed by adult fantasy,
Go on now..begone..do not cling
to broken wings of ecstasy…

copyright*budhaaah*
For http://themethursday.blogspot.com/
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.blogspot.com/
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13 comments:

  1. Kodjo DeynooFebruary 16, 2011 at 11:51 PM

    Words, free flowing words, me love this good good

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  2. NankaFebruary 17, 2011 at 1:13 AM

    Did get the feel of the break and I thought I heard the break too. Lovely poem!

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  3. anthonynorthFebruary 17, 2011 at 1:54 AM

    Sad words well expressed.

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  4. the walking manFebruary 17, 2011 at 2:32 AM

    You owe no one anything 'cept a wee lass.

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  5. Brian MillerFebruary 17, 2011 at 3:20 AM

    that 3rd stanza is where my heart broke...

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  6. washiFebruary 17, 2011 at 5:44 AM

    Wow! One word...evocative

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  7. RashmiFebruary 17, 2011 at 5:46 AM

    "Go on now..begone..do not cling
    to broken wings of ecstasy"
    Yes ,this is a sad poem but in the end you are saying of moving on..I love this one...

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  8. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallFebruary 17, 2011 at 7:08 AM

    powerful and sad,
    beautifully done.
    Happy Rally.
    :)

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  9. eyeographyFebruary 17, 2011 at 9:14 PM

    Some people do feel like this...
    very well written :)

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  10. Paulog30February 18, 2011 at 1:28 PM

    Really love the last four lines, awesome!!

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  11. WatsonFebruary 23, 2011 at 6:55 PM

    Powerful lines. As an adult survivor of childhood abuse I found they touched me deeply.
    Thank you

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  12. AnonymousFebruary 27, 2011 at 7:00 PM

    Happy Sunday!

    Please vote, you are nominated, you win one vote automatically, if you vote, you win another vote..!
    Thanks for the time!
    Good Luck!

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  13. Maggie Patti Barbara Frankford-WaltonDecember 20, 2011 at 5:05 AM

    Greetings:

    Hope all is well.

    Noting that you have been part of poets rally in the year of 2011,
    what an achievement, thanks for your outstanding contribution to us
    along the way, keep up the excellence. Best!

    Come join our poetry rally today if you wish to mingle and get inspired!

    A poem of your choice or a free verse is accepted.


    Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

    Looking forward to seeing you share.
    Respect and hugs.
    xoxox

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