Thursday, January 27, 2011

all traces..Friday Flash 55.....

Oh pure joy it has been
to see and to be seen
with you..I sigh
tis tough saying goodbye
and then it sinks in

something dies within...

You throw away a slip
a parking ticket..a chit..
with a sinking heart - I see - sweet
you erasing all traces
of the day spent with me...

copyright*budhaaah*
Tell a story in 55 words. go see g-man at http://g-man-mrknowitall.blogspot.com/
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14 comments:

  1. G-ManJanuary 27, 2011 at 8:43 PM

    Budh.aaah..
    Sad and powerful!
    Excellent 55 My Friend.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
    Great Job!!!!

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  2. Alice AudreyJanuary 27, 2011 at 11:30 PM

    So sad, but wonderfully written.

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  3. moondustwriterJanuary 28, 2011 at 1:15 AM

    the scenario is well written in so few words
    some things aren't meant to be

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  4. BelindaJanuary 28, 2011 at 1:16 AM

    Not the perfect ending to an otherwise perfect day. Enjoyed this.

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  5. Brian MillerJanuary 28, 2011 at 3:12 AM

    oh this one has a sting...i like the parking chit as with it once we got what we needed it becomes useless...great metaphor...nice 55

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  6. the walking manJanuary 28, 2011 at 4:30 AM

    But that thrown away ticket can always come back with a bite.

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  7. BubbaJanuary 28, 2011 at 5:00 AM

    It's sad to be discarded like an old scrap of paper.

    (In fact, I wrote a similar piece called "Paper")

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  8. Felicity Grace TerryJanuary 28, 2011 at 7:11 AM

    Amazing that such a story can be told in so few words.

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  9. BubbaJanuary 28, 2011 at 7:33 AM

    Paper

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  10. SYJanuary 28, 2011 at 8:58 AM

    Wow.. to me this sounds like a breakup... Like after it's over you just start to erase them.

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  11. DebJanuary 28, 2011 at 10:04 AM

    Very sad and hits close to home. I remember a past loved one telling me how I erased her out of her life, little by little, removing home videos of us, removing blog posts written about her, ------removing her. But she was never quite "removed" in my heart. Look beyond.
    Beautiful piece.

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  12. RNSANEJanuary 28, 2011 at 12:50 PM

    Rather heartbreaking in so few words. It's amazing how much one can so so briefly. Excellent job!

    Mine is at:

    http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/01/friday-flash-55-biggest-loser-january.html#links

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  13. izzyJanuary 29, 2011 at 5:13 AM

    I suppose the fire could be from a broken heart!
    to be seen and felt is good- but the walking away
    or being left- no. Thanks-

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  14. RavenJanuary 29, 2011 at 8:44 PM

    Heartbreaking :(

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