Thursday, December 2, 2010

Stone..

Steep stone terrain
weak resolve
sweet succour - beckons us all
win we must - or face our crime
- apathy - disdain -
overbearing drive...

copyright*budhaaah*

19 comments:

  1. love the contrast in textures in the first several lines...win we must, yes...

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  2. Oh it does, and has done for centuries now.
    You need about a dozen for a good sized store building. These days they are mainly used for decoration, as they were always made from real stone and quite handsome.
    I am ambivalent about the pronunciation of succour :-), and probably unanimous in that.
    Comes from reading poems out loud in my head. If that is indeed possible.
    Oh dear, I'd better stop...

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  3. Win we must to conquer all with a strong determination or else the terrain continues to be steep and we can never reach the end.

    Well thought lines here!!

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  4. Sometimes knowledge comes in a flash. but for most of us things are always through 'Steep stone terrain' and sweet morbid sentimentalism, all are illusions..what else? may be my innate Raja quality always throws me into a profound egotism but i believe whatever comes just face the brute, and no compromise. that is a lesson for all life - face the brute whether thorny path, morbid weaknesses, only one thing always count - face it boldly. the hardships of life fall back when we cease to flee before them.
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    this is an incredible verse. I like it very much. inspiration comes from anywhere, just do not make the fire die inside.

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  5. welcome to poets rally.
    cute piece.

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  7. Beautiful words... really well done:-)

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  8. Very good word choice, alliteration, vivid imagery--to the point--I really liked this.

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  9. The human condition shines through. -J

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  10. Short and simple, yet solid, with a strong message.

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  11. The inherent message conveyed is stronger than stones.

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  12. Thanks a ton everyone for your precious visit and the kind comments.

    Yes Brian,
    even though taught otherwise - winning sometimes is everything right win we must even if it be for self preservation..

    Nanka, I couldnt get through to your blog

    Ahh Shubhajit,

    You use the word incredible and that warms me old heart :)

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  13. Lovely poem. I suppose you're right - we must win...at something otherwise we're just losers huh.

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  14. Strong and powerful poetry...

    "Steep stone terrain
    weak resolve
    sweet succour"

    Amazing... :)

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  15. I like short and sweet! Keep pushing for the victory, awesome..

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  16. Thank you for the thoughtful, stony thoughts.

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