Tuesday, November 16, 2010

one shot

There is a fultility to my love
but burn I must
and then my sweet
your caress heals
as lips seal
my wound
Oh why do I
wake up ever
from this dream
There's a futility to love/loving
so beautiful and yet..


My shot for 'one shot wednesday' a platform for poets and aspiring poets
http://www.oneshotpoetry.blogspot.com/

14 comments:

  1. there are times when a single line in a poem jumps out like a flame and burns you...

    and in this case it is literal...

    "but burn i must"

    one line says it all.

    beautiful.

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  2. Lovely poem. It depicts love in a way we can all relate.

    Also read your One Shoot Sunday. That was awesome. Nice writing.

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  3. you know that is exquisite...why do we ever wake up...i dont know...

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  4. Joanne,
    Thank you so much

    Myrna,
    Hey thanks a ton. I was aprehensive about this one though..

    Brian,
    Thank you. You do see that I still didnt get the hang of the link thing :)

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  5. We always return to that fire. Nice One Shot!

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  6. Nice exercise in pointlessness about exercises in futility. The pointless structure/inherence of the work structures love's futility - more effective than mere irony.

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  7. Some realities are like waking up from a dream. Well done.

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  8. A great read@ I gotta say, nothing's truer than a line in a song "burn, baby, burn" and no matter the singe or the char we all continue to do so.

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  9. Thank you all for visiting and commenting :)

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  10. thank you! great imagery... as a current burning muster thinking it might just all be futile.. well, you nailed it! ;-)

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  11. Dear Budha.aah

    Futility of dream.. well without dreams, there is not fulfillment of it.. I liked this one..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  13. Hi joseph,
    Well burn we must to ashes if not satisfied :)

    Shashi,
    Without fulfillment after a while one stops dreaming

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  14. Dreams without passion become hollow... so burn we must.

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