Illegitimate
is the sun..
which peeks
through the rain
Begone
for the drops perish
and yours will be
the blame..
copyright*budhaaah*
for poetry Potluck
Friday, November 12, 2010
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I am - and - I was/ I feel - and yet - I lost/ I am - in deep/ and yet I float/ In debt and yet/ - I hope..
Hrmmmmmmm...
ReplyDeleteThis one was tricky for me.. although very beautiful, I think I have to put me decoder glasses on....
Hrmmmmmmm....
I like this.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting my blog and leaving a nice comment.
Just like "breaking up", relaxing is hard to do.
This one is excellent. A sort of sarcasm reflects i guess
ReplyDeleteHi Jo,
ReplyDeleteTapping into your innermost emotions and feelings. Keep up the great work. Love it. Keep in touch. Rick
Makes you think for sure - and giving me a headache!
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Interesting piece. Feels like a love hate relationship between the sun and the rain, yet I can't tell which you love more.
ReplyDeleteHappy Potluck. Here's my piece
http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2011/01/24/searching/
I like it's rocking..
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And when the sun does that we get rainbows!
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Nice play between the elements, and that suggestion that the sun has no right to kill the rain and will be blamed for it...captures a mood well.
ReplyDeletethe sun is breaking the laws...nice twist...happy potluck!
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this is a nice one buddhaaah! here's my potluck for this week: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/08/04/here-for-you/
ReplyDeleteAt first glance, it seems a simple piece, but on re-reading it, it really is a deeper statement about the powers of both rain and sun. I liked it. :)
ReplyDeleteI like this poem...thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteGreetings…
ReplyDeletePlease help visit a few poets 2 wish them happy birthdays, Thanks!
Your contribution to our community is highly valued!
Keep up the excellence!
Cheers!