Friday, November 12, 2010

Illegitimate
is the sun..
which peeks
through the rain
Begone
for the drops perish
and yours will be
the blame..


copyright*budhaaah*
for poetry Potluck

14 comments:

  1. Hrmmmmmmm...
    This one was tricky for me.. although very beautiful, I think I have to put me decoder glasses on....

    Hrmmmmmmm....

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  2. I like this.

    Thanks for visiting my blog and leaving a nice comment.

    Just like "breaking up", relaxing is hard to do.

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  3. This one is excellent. A sort of sarcasm reflects i guess

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  4. Hi Jo,
    Tapping into your innermost emotions and feelings. Keep up the great work. Love it. Keep in touch. Rick

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  5. Makes you think for sure - and giving me a headache!

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/01/24/dark-teen/

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  6. Interesting piece. Feels like a love hate relationship between the sun and the rain, yet I can't tell which you love more.
    Happy Potluck. Here's my piece
    http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2011/01/24/searching/

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  7. I like it's rocking..

    http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/

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  8. And when the sun does that we get rainbows!

    http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2011/01/24/boundaries-jingles-poetry-potluck/

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  9. Nice play between the elements, and that suggestion that the sun has no right to kill the rain and will be blamed for it...captures a mood well.

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  10. the sun is breaking the laws...nice twist...happy potluck!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/

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  11. this is a nice one buddhaaah! here's my potluck for this week: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/08/04/here-for-you/

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  12. At first glance, it seems a simple piece, but on re-reading it, it really is a deeper statement about the powers of both rain and sun. I liked it. :)

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  13. I like this poem...thought provoking.

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  14. Greetings…

    Please help visit a few poets 2 wish them happy birthdays, Thanks!

    Your contribution to our community is highly valued!
    Keep up the excellence!
    Cheers!

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