I am - and - I was/ I feel - and yet - I lost/ I am - in deep/ and yet I float/ In debt and yet/ - I hope..
Gone with the wind a smile before it has achance to break outa tear that dies before it's shed.Sorry budh.aaah couldn't help myself.
In any case its interesting - not wrong..so no sorry between friends.
I am not a fan of the repetition you've used here "no good no good no good". But, I like the underlying message very much.
Brosreview, Thank you for visiting and leaving a comment on my blog. I appreciate it.
I like the "no good" repetition here because it is repeated once for each line. That it is used at the end, to me seems a sharper point than putting one at the end of each line.
Gone with the wind
ReplyDeletea smile before it has a
chance to break out
a tear that
dies before it's shed.
Sorry budh.aaah couldn't help myself.
In any case its interesting - not wrong..so no sorry between friends.
ReplyDeleteI am not a fan of the repetition you've used here "no good no good no good". But, I like the underlying message very much.
ReplyDeleteBrosreview, Thank you for visiting and leaving a comment on my blog. I appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteI like the "no good" repetition here because it is repeated once for each line. That it is used at the end, to me seems a sharper point than putting one at the end of each line.
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