1)
lying alone in the dark
your promises come back to me
outside its all black/dark
Inside - no good, no good, no good..
2)
Gone - with the wind
like a smile
like a tear
that dies inside
Tuesday, March 3, 2009
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Gone with the wind
ReplyDeletea smile before it has a
chance to break out
a tear that
dies before it's shed.
Sorry budh.aaah couldn't help myself.
In any case its interesting - not wrong..so no sorry between friends.
ReplyDeleteI am not a fan of the repetition you've used here "no good no good no good". But, I like the underlying message very much.
ReplyDeleteBrosreview, Thank you for visiting and leaving a comment on my blog. I appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteI like the "no good" repetition here because it is repeated once for each line. That it is used at the end, to me seems a sharper point than putting one at the end of each line.
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