I am - and - I was/ I feel - and yet - I lost/ I am - in deep/
and yet I float/ In debt and yet/
- I hope..
Gone with the wind a smile before it has achance to break outa tear that dies before it's shed.Sorry budh.aaah couldn't help myself.
In any case its interesting - not wrong..so no sorry between friends.
I am not a fan of the repetition you've used here "no good no good no good". But, I like the underlying message very much.
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I like the "no good" repetition here because it is repeated once for each line. That it is used at the end, to me seems a sharper point than putting one at the end of each line.